I will talk about ''Christian Scientist Parents on Trial in Girl's Death'' and my opinions about court's judgement of the Hermansons.
Firstly,I want to tell the story which we read.The Hermansons decide to try to heal the child with prayer rather than seek a doctor's aid.They rely on prayers much more than a doctor's aid.So, although they know that their daughter is very ill especially diabetes,they go to the prayer.After bit later, their daughter dies.In spite of their faults,the Hermansons go to complain prayer to court.
In my opinion, I am very opposite to their thoughts.This event is very depressing.Because they are so brave that they don't go to the doctor.I think, the doctor is the most important factor to heal ill person.The doctor gives a lot of drugs and informations about her illness to ill person.For example, one of my relatives didn't go to the doctor for her illness.She preferred to go to the prayer much.Although her illness was very serious and destructive,she didn't go to the doctor.So, unfortunately she died.If she had gone to doctor, she would have lived now.
According to me, the doctor and medicines are the most important factor to heal.The health cares are improving constantly at nowadays.It is so advanced that it cures almost every illness.As a conclusion, we must go to the doctor at first.Also, we can pray for healing.We mustn't neglect our health.If we want to live a long time and healtily, we often should go to the doctor's control.
While ı was reading your essay,ı realized that your essay is appropriate with each other.It has ıntruductıon,body and conclusıon paragraphs.All topic sentences support the thesis statement.And you also used your past experiences.These are good things for an essay ı think.On the other hand, there are some lackness.Some sentences are not clear and there are some grammar faults.For example,in a sentence you said:’ıf she had gone to doctor,she would have lived now.’But main part is not right I think.Instead you should have said:’she would live now.’
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